My hope for my group’s pitch deck section (world) is that is accurately captures the rural essence of Barrel and Behind Bars in its exploration of class and criminal reform. Our protagonist is essentially thrown into the deep end, barred from his top-shelf lifestyle and is forced to grapple with and navigate another world. Ultimately, I hope our section portrayed the nuance within the show’s world/hub. As well, I hope my individual script section provides an insight into the show’s tone and style, as well as appropriately depicts the characters, world, and genre, adopting elements of drama, suspense, and comedy.

If I were to continue with this script, I would like to work on making the characters’ voices distinct from one another. So far, I think the characters that I have written all somewhat sound the same, especially in terms of swearing, slang, and tone. Though, I think this could also be an advantage, as it would link many characters together. In some way, the city-country dynamic could shine through in each character’s speech. On the other hand, this could make it difficult to differentiate between characters when reading or hearing the script. That is essentially what I would work on is character voice. Alongside that (less importantly) I would work on my writing on scene headings. I feel like my script relies quite heavily on scene headings and action, and I have a tendency to condense my writing as much as possible, making them quite short. Likely, I would end up with a script much shorter than expected, and, while this isn’t a big deal, is not exactly in the requirements for this task.

Overall, this semester has been pretty good. I do think the collaboration in this class went well, if not was led by a few people in the class, myself excluded, which is not to say that us non-talkers didn’t have ideas, take liberties, or add to the show’s premise. Speaking of which, initially, I didn’t like the show’s premise of a bar in prison, but, as the characters, world, and narrative was developed I gradually began liking it. Though, there was a time somewhere in the middle where I couldn’t hate it any less. I think this came from the unconventional approach we had towards the prison-drama show, that is, bending tropes and making more of a metaphorical prison (like The Good Place) rather than an actual prison (like Wentworth). Ultimately, our show came together through collaboration, and I don’t think I would really change much about it, despite my early hatred of it.