Today was studio pitches day. In our little groups we pitched our ideas to a panel comprised of Paul, Dan and an impressive lady whose name I shamelessly forgot, so I shall refer to as ‘impressive director lady’. It was interesting to listen to each of the groups ideas, however, more so to listening to our own feedback. For the most part it seemed the panel was satisfied with how clear and formed our pitch was. Dan noted that he could very clearly see the look we were going for, and that it was quite david lynch-esque. That was pleasing. However, when impressive director lady suggested that since we planned to work with older and experienced actors, it might be a good idea to allow them to get a feel for the location and create their own narrative that we would capture. My fellow group members nodded thoughtfully, my stomach dropped to somewhere around my knee. “No!” I yelled internally, “don’t encourage them to throw out the script! Anything but the script!” After our turn was over, and I got over the initial shock of impressive director lady’s feedback, I thought about it a lot. I think at the core of it, she was saying, “don’t get married to any one idea. The location you have selected, is a character in of itself, listen to it. Allow it to influence your narrative.” At least that’s the message I took away from it. Discussing it with my other group members, that’s exactly what we did. We re-wrote the script to better utilise the space. Like a character we wanted to write more dialog for, we wrote more scenes to now include additional exterior shots, the locker room, and the powder room.

My side-shoot script before feedback from the panel: script_draft_box-20w8z85

My script after feedback from the panel: the magnificent THORNBURY BOWLS CLUB-1lr7bhk

The BLUEMOON before feedback script: script box rosie-wz4sdo
(The BLUEMOON after is still in development)