I feel as if we told our story quite well. The idea as portraying the different personalities and diverse culture, in my opinion, came off quite well. However, I feel as if there could have been a few more advancements to our presentation as whole.

Firstly, I think it may have been more engaging, not that it wasn’t already, if we had a slide show which portrayed some visuals of the ideas we’re all having. For instance, when I was talking about the idea of a Mockumentary, it may have been helpful to show a trailer for Summer Heights High, or The Office (probably the US version, sorry UK…) Anyway, I feel as if audiences react a bit better when they have visual aid, so thats something to consider for next time. Also, this could have really supplemented Ashton’s idea for a title sequence reminiscent of Game of Thrones, or Flight of the Conchords in again, helping the audience to conceptualise things.

Secondly, I think it may have been a benefit to me if I talked slightly more about how we’re planning on creating the show. I could have aluded to the fact that despite us having an inspiration from Summer Heights High in having seperate story arcs, we could have the same group of interviewers perhaps in each story arc, which could act as another way of linking the characters together as interviewers are key characters within Mockumentaries. I think I successfully talked about how we’re thinking of conveying our idea however, I think people understood our concept. I could have definitely elaborated more upon our mockumentary style that we’re currently proposing.

Finally, this isn’t an improvement, but I’m happy with the feedback we got towards the end. I liked the idea that even though in real life Melbourne has been voted as one of the most liveable cities on the planet, that through our mockumentary we could show an opposition to that and through our characters, perhaps play upon that idea. One suggestion in particular, which was in relation to Ashton’s title sequence which through audio, would link our three main characters together. I liked Brian’s idea to perhaps use the audio of a song playing on the street transition into the car radio or headphones to link the characters together. That has some cool potential and we should consider that. Finally, I think we should consider as well, how we can make Melbourne a character. WE should try to convey a personality of some sort. We’ll figure out how in due course.

However though, it seems like thats it. I feel like we presented our progress and our proposal well.