For my discussion of another group’s pitch I have chosen Arielle, Tal and Nowie’s Pentridge pitch. In terms of the actual pitch presentation, I thought the group put together something very engaging and fulfilling. The accompanying visuals were well-crafted and really gave you a sense of the film they wanted to create; they were also very practical in explaining the proposed process of their film. Tal in particular was very eloquent and engaging, and put forth this great parallel between Pentridge Prison and his own “imprisonment” as a reluctant resident in its new housing development. There was also a very clear path visible from their concept to how it would be enacted. As I discussed in my self-reflection, our presentation perhaps lacked a clear connection between the two; in the Pentridge pitch, you could see how their proposed interviews and images would translate the concepts they spoke about in the pitch itself.

In this studio we’ve focused on this idea of neighbourhood, which I found strangely absent from this group’s pitch. I don’t think it detracted from the quality of the pitch or will detract from any eventual film piece, but I believe that their pitch focused more on place than neighbourhood. My only advice in relation to this would be to perhaps talk about the perceived lack of neighbourhood that exists in Pentridge, and how this relates to its history as a place. If I’m being honest, despite the strength of the pitch, I would be hesitant to fund this film on a very limited budget just because of its enormous scope. Although it’s fine to collect as much information and footage as possible, a slightly clearer and more precise focus would ensure that said information and footage isn’t too diverse and all over the place, and will form a cohesive project once condensed to the 3-5 minute format. I believe if you cast the net too wide, it can become too difficult to fit all the best bits in one project in a way where they are all relevant to the same point of contention, whereas a more honed approach with a clear contention always in the back of the mind will ensure a tighter project.