The feedback I received from my presentation was mostly positive, with a lot of praise for the visual world that I had managed to capture. This is something that I found both easy to do and really effective in creating my screen world, as it’s something that from early on I was able to visualise if not yet able to write within it or completely contextualise how and why it exists. Before I had more solid ideas on how the world came to be, I knew how it was, and especially how it looked.

The main criticism I received was my lack of focus or explanation on how this middle-class only society I have described has affected the culture and social norms. I did briefly mention the dilapidation and decay of society, both physically and I suppose symbolically in the breakdown of the relationship between George and Martha, but I haven’t explained well what everyday life is like for people living in this “classless” society. I feel like one of the reasons for this is that it can be very hard to demonstrate a lack of something, particularly when it manifests in a negative way; if we’re portraying a classless society in a positive way, it’s very easy to show everyone happy, healthy, wealthy etc., but the negative view is much more subtle and therefore more difficult to demonstrate and describe. A step I will take to build on this feedback is make sure that both the classlessness of society and the decay that comes with it is apparent in whatever audiovisual work I submit in my final project brief; this will most likely be in the form of a mood reel or teaser that shows this futuristic, modern world that is beginning to wear down and fall apart. Secondly, as I progress through writing more of my screenplay, I must clearly demonstrate this gap of class and then show how easily it is filled (since it is almost necessary that it is filled) when the android turns up at the house of George and Martha; I want to show how natural it is for this class divide to exist, but also how toxic this interclass relationship can be. My script will need further development before I believe this is possible.