Today was the pitch session for our Assignment 3 for Seeing the Unseen V2. I was picked randomly to go second, which I was happy about, as it allowed me to get it out of the way and done and relax and observe for the rest of the class. At this time, my piece is 80 percent finished, as I need to clean up the cuts and transitions, as well as figure out how to finish the piece within the narrative.

Through the feedback given by the three panel members, the main points I came away with was to really think about and plan your final shot, as it will have a lot of impact on the viewer and wrap up the narrative. Furthermore, the panel reiterated the need to perfectly time the cuts between shots.

Probably the most important piece of feedback was the ideas of how I could end the film within the narrative, by having the final shots focus on the overpowering presence industry now has over nature in more densely populated city areas, such as the CBD and Sydney Road’s dense shopfront areas. From these suggestions, I’ve decided that I am going to let the song naturally fade out like it does normally, rather than loop the intense sections and abruptly cut it out. To me, this is symbolic of the ever-lacking presence of nature within the urban environments, and the everpresent industrial feel of both these final shots, and the song as a whole. This to me is the idea of nature dying, and losing the battle to industry that has been portrayed throughout the start and middle of the film, especially the starting shot, which is of an overgrown water pipe, rusted and swallowed by nature. This can be seen in the screengrab below.

Here is a link to the draft shown in class in my pitch today as well.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=1T6-TI8xe9ii1AAv5Er4USp7UfcksgOHJ