In class today, we chose an allocated timeslot and came into class for 30 minutes to present our work to Hannah and a small focus group. I came in at 10:30 am and showed my piece to a few peers and the tutor. Before I got feedback, I knew I needed to obtain more shots to fill up the timeline of the piece, as well as to perfectly time the transitions between the shots.

Some of the feedback I got was to really think about the order of the shots within the timeline, as well as again, the timing and pace of the piece. My original first shot was a close up of a rusted screw in a playground. The shot started still, but a child started to climb up and around the surface that the tripod was placed on. Thinking about this idea of pace, I moved that shot closer to the buildup in the song, using this camera shake to symbolically show the buildup of the piece and the song.

Furthermore, thinking about the exact order of the shots got me thinking about the nonfictional narrative that can be seen throughout the film, without the use of dialogue. The rusted objects and overgrown environments suggest to the viewer that this is a world that has been overrun by the clash of nature and industry and their everlasting battle to claim their environments. This has gotten me thinking about how I can portray that idea of a desolate landscape even more so visually, maybe with a manipulation of the tempo, looping and distorting audio, and colour, desaturating the landscape.

At this point during the production stage, I am having trouble communicating with the artist of the track. I have spoken to them, and they have seen my messages, but they are yet to respond. Heres hoping they get back to me before week 8!