For this part of the assignment, I have chosen to compare a rough and finished version of the Billie Buttons sequence.
The reason I chose this segment of Georgie Currie, was because it features chopped up and rearranged audio. The aim of each piece is the same, to elaborate on the importance of flowers (specifically billie buttons) throughout the album artwork, and also on the thematic element of flowers through the whole EP (titled flowers for you worst days).
The original clip felt somewhat disjointed, Georgie stammered a lot throughout the explanation, and we felt this would cause the audience to lose attention somewhat. Eliminating some of those pauses and stammers cleaned up the sequence quite well, but it still wasn’t quite working for us. Taking it to Rohan, he suggested rearranging the order of what she says and moving the B-roll around a bit to cover the new audio cuts. Moving the word “Billie Buttons” and the image of the flowers in the vase to the very front of the sequence completed changed the feel. Instead of feeling a bit slow and dry, the audience immediately knew exactly what the flower was, and what it looked like at the top of this small segment.
We also moved the location of this part of the interview to right before the florist footage. I think this formed a very clear throughline from the first half of the interview into the interlude. Having Georgie talk about the flower, and why flowers were important to her lead into the visuals of her playing in a florist in front of a wall of flowers really well, and the thematic coherence added a lot to the piece.
Finally, this rearranging is somewhat reminiscent, in a more broad sense, of the entire piece. The original ordering and focus of the first cut just didn’t work. It didn’t have that sense of coherent, concise flow that is required to make a successful film. Chopping the irrelevant small details, putting the important lines/shots right at the front and giving it a proper sense of order really brought both this sequence, and the entire film together.