everyone’s a critic: week 9 update

by Annie Cooper

Week 9’s Wednesday class included another helpful grammar session. This time around, we looked at the New Yorker’s Comma Queen video series. The series includes 32 short videos, where long time New Yorker copy editor Mary Norris meticulously explains basic (and not so basic) grammar rules.

We watched two Comma Queen videos, both of which were extremely helpful.

The first, was on the difference between effect and affect. We learned that “affect” is a verb, and “effect” is a noun- except in certain occasions where they are the other way around. “Affect” means to make a difference to, whereas “effect” indicates a change that is a result or consequence of an action.

The second video we watched was on dangling participles. We learned that when you begin a sentence with a participle, that phrase has to modify the subject of the sentence. Norris used an example from Reeves Wiedeman’s article on Simone Biles to explain how a dangling participle can be fixed:

Incorrect: Seeing Biles at Pacific Rims, it seemed as if Isaac Newton had written a different set of laws on her behalf.

Correct: Seeing Biles next to her competition at Pacific Rims, I felt as if Isaac Newton had written a different set of laws on her behalf.

These videos were very helpful for our class, as both of these grammar rules are easy to get wrong. It reminded us of the importance of proofreading, and staying aware of basic grammar rules.

everyone’s a critic: week 8 update

By Mikayla Hyndman

Week 8’s Monday class began with the long-awaited introduction to Alexandra Heller-Nicholas – an Australian film critic, broadcaster and writer. Initially, Alexandra guided us briefly through how she was going to run the discussion for today, including topics such as the role of the critic, consumer advice and cultural criticism.

Alexandra then spoke to us about an inspiration of hers; Pauline Kael, a film critic from the New Yorker. To give us a taste of why she considered Kael so great, Alexandra showed us a film clip titled The Current Critic where Kael details her time at the New Yorker, and states that the best films are the “ones least expected”. Here, Alexandra used this clip to drive the discussion about what is and what isn’t good film criticism

Here are the points she discussed:

  • TASTE ­– “Taste classifies and it classifies the classifier”. Alexandra made sure that we understood the factors of taste, such as class and social differences and we can distinguish taste from context and opinion.
  • PRIVILEGE AND BIAS – Racial, class, gender bias/differences, privileges. Alexandra also mentioned something called “ego privilege” before proposing the question of a film critic’s authority in telling the audience what films are considered great and what are not.
  • AUDIENCE – We should always be cautious in considering our audience. Who are they and how can we connect to them?
  • SCALE AND DETAIL
  • HISTORY
  • CONTEXT & OPINION

When Alexandra mentioned the concept of opinion, context and taste by advising the class to use our taste as a guide but to keep it in check. However, she also mentioned that having taste isn’t a bad thing as we are all human and have things that we enjoy and things we don’t enjoy.

Towards the end of the class, we watched an Australian short film by Lucas Testro titled I’m You, Dickhead (2014). The class was divided on whether they enjoyed the short or not, and before long, we were asked to write a capsule review (around 200-400 words) and then swap our work with someone else in the class. Overall, we discussed the interesting concept of how everyone can watch the same thing yet still take on different ideas and create totally different arguments.

This was the last time we got together this week, as Wednesday’s class was cancelled. If anyone wanted to watch the short film again, here is the link: https://www.shortoftheweek.com/2015/08/13/im-you-dickhead/

everyone’s a critic: week 6 update

by Jasmine Wallis & Grace Marks

Monday’s class saw us discussing the definition of a curator. We analysed how it has changed over time. It doesn’t solely refer to art gallery or museum curators anymore, now any individual can be a curator online using a blog, website or Instagram; much like the idea that everyone’s a critic. As a class we tried to outline the differences between a critic and a curator. In this task we unravelled the wide and jumbled web of a modern day curator like Gwyneth Paltrow and her lifestyle “instruction manual”, Goop. We asked ourselves is it a genuine collection of tips and tricks to achieve a healthy happy life or perhaps just a pretentious collection of products the average Jo or Joanne could never afford?

Alexia gave us two readings for the class to read out together, prompting more discussion that helped us nut out the confusing world of curation. The studio finished with an update on PB3 and what our coming weeks looked like.

Wednesday’s 8:30am class began with everyone picking a TV show to write about with no idea what the angle/ topic was going to be. Alexia handed out around a bag of one worded prompts and we then embarked on a ten-minute word association, brain dump extravaganza. After we’d all extracted our ideas we went around the class and shared what we’d come up with. Some interesting ones were ‘Sex and the City’ with the prompt “architecture” and ‘Everybody Loves Raymond’ with the word, “night”. This exercise is definitely a good way to get your mind running and make you realise that really there’s a way to write about practically anything.

bag of regret

Once we’d finished that exercise and had a few diverging discussion about Lockie Leonard and other celebrities we’d met, we began a lesson on grammar. It’s really important to get a refresher as we begin our writing careers, especially considering that most of us haven’t had a grammar lesson since primary school. We discussed the difference between active and passive sentences, for example,

Somebody stole my laptop.

My laptop was stolen by somebody.

We identified the object (laptop), the verb (stole) and the subject (somebody)

We can identify the first sentence as ACTIVE because the subject does the action to the object. It’s more clear and gets to the point more quickly.

Another example is:

While Mr. Taylor was driving down Highway 101, he was pulled over and given a ticket by an officer. (PASSIVE)

 While Mr Taylor was driving down Highway 101, a police officer pulled him over, and gave him a ticket. (ACTIVE)

Alexia encouraged us to use active sentences in our writing and be aware of the point we are trying to make. These are all great tips to assist us in our writing and improve our work for our portfolios!

everyone’s a critic: week 5 update

by Isabella Oliveria & Patrick McKee

This week Alexia introduced us to Yossi Klein, chief editor of Bread Wine and Thou. As a class, we worked through two pieces of criticism about French restaurants and food, and discussed the differences and the impact of both.

 As a class, we read through a review written by Jay Rayner and a review by A.A Gill, both about French restaurant experiences and both negative reviews. We looked at and outlined the key differences and similarities of the reviews and focused on the types of description and voice in both. We had not yet tackled the idea of the negative review so looking through these two articles – that differ so much in language and description –  gave us two different examples of negative criticism. Both articles had distinct voices, but were for two very different publications (The Guardian and Vanity Fair respectively) so the “humour” can be classified as “high brow” and “low brow”. This relates back to our Q&A session with Simran and Phillpa last week ensuring that you pick the right publication for your voice.

We also were able to have a Q&A session with Yossi about his writing career and projects. Hearing Yossi’s stories and attitude towards writing was quite inspiring as it gave us another perspective on critical writing and writing in general. Yossi’s key argument was that “everyone has a story to tell”. I think I really related to the ideas of telling stories about the particular thing you are writing about (in this case, we were discussing wine) rather than boring your audiences with details about your subject.

 

Some of the advice that Yossi gave us:

  • *Writing finds you
  • *Everyone has the ability to tell stories
  • *Don’t be egotistical, be honest
  • *Be self critical: you’ll know when it becomes counter- productive.
  • *Everything is derivative, we are influenced and receptive to everything

 

 

Embarking on a significantly different task from Monday’s tutorial, however, was in Wednesday’s lesson where our class was set with the challenge of completing our very first descriptive task. The process involved creating what Alexia termed as “explosive sentences”; essentially, the aim of the task was to transform an initially bland paragraph – one that was devoid of any compelling details or emotion-inducing phrases – and to ultimately add some of our own personal flare to it, making the paragraph “explode” with imagery and description.

The choice was ours to make in terms of what sentence of the paragraph we wanted to embellish and, in spite of the task’s seemingly easy exterior, many of us found it quite tricky to revamp an entire sentence that didn’t necessarily have a whole lot of meat to work with. On the other hand, there was a select few of us that found that the sparseness of detail actually helped to ignite a multitude of narrative possibilities, ushering us into an hour long writing session which tested our creative flare and ability to construct a story.

After the allocated time had passed, it was time to share our newly refurbished sentences, starting from the first sentence and working our way to the last. Indeed, it was here that we found just how disparate many of our stories were in the sense that the same sentences, edited by different students, could end up following completely different trajectories. Protagonists ranged from melancholy to utterly depressed and the setting either frantic and panic-stricken to desolate and solemn the next.

This tutorial was certainly filled with many “why didn’t I think of that?” moments and other creative revelations that not only helped us explore the extent of our descriptive writing capabilities, but to go beyond those boundaries as well.

everyone’s a critic: week 4 update

By Elise Schumacher & Stephanie Avro

This week we were challenged in Monday’s class to give one another feedback on either our PB2 drafts, or on other critical reviews that we have been working on. For a lot of us, giving and receiving feedback can be awkward and uncomfortable, but we are steadily growing better at it. Alexia read only the first sentence of our reviews, and gave us some excellent advice to take on for our writing across all fields: to always rewrite your introductory sentence and see how that manipulates the quality and both yours and other readers perception of the piece.

Simran Hans (UK) and Philippa Hawker (AUS) discuss how to pitch to editors

On Wednesday we participated in Q&A session with Critics Campus Mentors, Simran Hans (UK) & Philippa Hawker (AUS). Both well established writers this was a great opportunity to learn of what exists beyond our weekly tutorials. Opening the floor to us students, conversation seemed to steadily shift toward the idea of ‘pitching’, posing stories for publications to print, an area both Hans and Hawker are well familiar with. Introducing concepts such as a ‘Cold Pitch’, (sales approach to brand without any prior rapport), was a learning experience for I’m sure many students. The basic notes of pitching, as according to Hans are as follows:

  • Don’t waste a pitch on being too general, be specific, (keep it short)
  • Introduce yourself and text voice
  • Pitch a story, not an idea
  • Keep it tailored to publication
  • Include 3 examples of short published works
  • Pitch to multiple publications
  • Establish upfront if it is a paid job- ‘follow up with “what’s the deadline and fee?”’”.

We also discussed the specifics of a ‘writer’s voice’ and how the current media landscape has caused for many to change in order to appear ‘commerical’ to a wider audience- similar to Week2’s panel discussion, Critical Failure: Film. When asked how to develop on our own voice and tone, Hans and Hawker both assured that ‘If you write a lot, your authoritative voice will develop and come…It’s not something you look for or seek out’.

Taking us beyond the classroom, this session allowed us students to view the art of critical reviews from an international space.

everyone’s a critic: week 3 update

By Samuel Harris & Natalie Pitcher

Monday found us with our first in-class screening, Laura Gabbert’s City of Gold (2015), a profile of internationally renowned, Pulitzer Prize-winning food critic Jonathan Gold. Our task: to take notes in order to draft a review of the film, putting fingers to keyboards (or pen to paper) in the process of bulking (beginning) our portfolios. Getting into the swing of things, keeping the words flowing is where the success of the studio lies, and this exercise proved useful in giving us another avenue for our writing to go.

Following the screening we delved into a review from Gold himself, a reflection on his experience with a pop-up restaurant in Mexico. Switching from analysing his words onscreen to his words on paper helped further our understanding of his persona as a critic and in this close reading – a paragraph by paragraph comparison – we considered tone and point-of-view, with brief foray into the ethical considerations of food evoked in Gold’s writing.

 

A close reading of Edward Scissorhands reviews

Trying to write reflections, weekly updates, and as many reviews as possible for your folio be like

In Wednesday’s class, we analysed the styles and techniques used in reviews of Edward Scissorhands. We examined 5 quite different critics, including Paul Harris of 3RRR’s Film Buffs Forecast and Adrian Martin, former film review for The Age. The exercise was really useful in helping us prepare for an upcoming assessment–to profile an established critic–as well as making us aware of the different tools available to us as writers.

We considered four key elements in our analysis: word choice, sentence fluency, voice, and structure. In paying particular attention to these aspects we were able to form a pretty clear idea of the critic’s style by the end of each of each piece.

The main take-aways to keep in mind for our own writing:

  • Having authority is important–however, there’s a big difference between name-dropping and making references for the sake of showing-off, and letting your expertise speak for itself through discretion in your choice of (relevant) references.
  • Parenthetical statements and use of the em dash (–) can be a great way to inject a little personality, but be wary of overuse as they can also distract the reader and dilute the point you’re trying to make.
  • Stacking adjectives is a way to play with the rhythm of a sentence, but sometimes one word is better than three.
  • Always back up declarative statements with an example.
  • For the love of dogs, don’t just summarise the plot! Always provide new insights–if the reader wanted a synopsis they would have gone to IMDB.

everyone’s a critic: week 2 update

by Georgia Imfeld & Bradley Dixon

 

Reading for this week: Film Criticism: The Next Generation

Questions raised by this week’s reading:

What does it mean to be a critic in this day and age? How has technology influenced criticism? What gives a critic authority?

To start the week we watched a panel discussion on criticism with Adrian Martin, Gillian Armstrong, Mel Campbell, Fenella Kernebone and moderated by Peter Mares. Among other things they discussed their process, the importance of critics, the changing nature of criticism in the age of the internet, and the difference between simple “reviews” and the deeper level of analysis associated with “criticism”, which are all areas we will explore further later in semester.

constructive criticism brainstorm

Receiving feedback and constructive criticism from peers/editors is an important part of the writing process, so using some guidelines and techniques that ensure to feedback is framed in a positive manner (see above) we workshopped a 300-word review with a partner in class. This is the first time we’ve shared our work with others in the class, but instead of being daunting it was a great chance to get tips to improve our writing and also help others improve theirs.

critique session

 

 

everyone’s a critic: week 1 update

class brainstorm: “critical reviews should…”

Week one in the studio ‘Everyone’s a Critic’ consisted of an in-depth brainstorm of essentials that critical reviews should include and achieve. Two of the most important aspects we as a class were able to come up with and agree upon were ‘research’ and ‘description’. From the key ideas discussed in the brainstorm, and with each class member thinking of a piece of media they have recently consumed, the planning of our first 300 word reviews were ready to begin. Feedback and ideas were bounced off each other as we heard everyone’s plans and direction for their review’s on their chosen film, TV show or book, which were all so incredibly interesting and different from each other. Through this first exercise we will learn how to create individuality within our views and the way they are expressed, and develop our own persona that can be carried throughout the rest of the semester.

— Isobel Smart & Joss Utting