For this piece, I tried to change the style of observational writing that I was doing to experiment with it a little further. The topic was something as simple as finding somewhere to sit in a busy study area, but the delivery of this topic was completely different to my previous pieces. It was interesting, but I think it bordered too far on creative writing for this purpose. Some feedback would be appreciated on this.
“It is busy here today”, I think to myself as I glance around the study space in front of me, trying to find a single inch to slot myself in for the long study session ahead.
I look over to the far side of the room. There is one chair available here, but this is not what caught my eye. What caught my eye rather was a loud, pale blue leather jacket, its collar popped up to reveal a bright red plaid shirt underneath. This is an outfit that brings attention to itself.
The young man wearing it has sunk himself deep into his chair, arcing himself away from the table in front of him. His feet tap slowly and with arms outstretched he is softly holding onto the table in front of him. His head sits back, but I don’t think he is admiring the tiling on the ceiling.
He is impatient.
Occasionally he will reach out towards the table, rolling his jacket sleeves up in the process to reveal the hideous shirt beneath it. He picks up the phone faced down in front of him, looks at it for a split-second, only to put it down again.
This continues for quite some time.
Every now and then though, he pauses as he inspects the device. Then, a faint smile appears on his face. He even releases a barely audible laugh, only just letting it escape from his lips.
Speedily, he taps away on the device after what seems to be a mere moment of thought, before putting his phone back down again. He leans back again, his jacket making a slight crinkle, as he continues this cycle again.
I look elsewhere for a place to sit.
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